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Varying sentence structure

Asked by Misspinky145 | Oct 30, 2008 | GCSE Level > English > Coursework
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Misspinky145 asks:

This is really simple but i am also really stuck. I've been told i need to vary senctence openings but I'm not sure how to do this one phrase:
"The sunrise was simply stunning."
I'd appreciate some help.
Thanks,
Kat

etutor answers:

There's nothing wrong with this as as opening sentence. Where it becomes a problem is if you use the same structure for the following sentence. For example, you might write:

 

'The sun sunrise was simply stunning. The sky was an awesome red. The geese were flying into the west.'

It would be better to write:

'The sun was simply stunning. Never before had the sky been such an awesome red. As the sun rose, a flock of geese emereged out of the east, heading westwards.'

Note in the second example the sentences are more varied.

Hope this helps

 

 

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