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How is conflict and violence represented in romeo and juliet and the WW1 poems?

 

This is an excellent piece of work. You focus on the question well and you offer a detailed analysis, supported by well integrated and pertinent quotations. Your essay is well structured and well-written. There is some excellent linking between paragraphs, good grasp of literary devices and an awareness of historical context. Well done!

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1, young soldiers going to war. [to go to war?]

2. the parents decision [the parents’ decision]

 

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Original Writing- The Island

 

 

This is an imaginative piece of writing and you use a good deal of descriptive writing. The events are a little hard to believe, and some of the amazing feats at the end seem to be achieved too easily. The ending seems a little rushed. Who saved you, for example, and where did they come from?

 

 

 

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1.       sun implanted through [there is no such verb as ‘implanted’]

2.       coupon for next years catalogue [next year’s catalogue]

3.       in it's dark waters [its]

 

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Original Writing

 

This is very good. You have used language to great effect to create an eerie and tnese atmosphere. You use descriptive words very well and you don’t try to do to much with teh stroy. Good ending, leaving the reader in suspense.

 

 

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1.       The light was staring to fade [starting]

2.       As I reached the end of the corridor[,] I froze

3.       The dank, green, lifeless ivy swept across the walls [good descriptive words here but don’t use too many – better to say:  The dank  ivy swept across the walls  - this has a more powerful effect.

 

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Bend it like Beckham film reveiw

 

The content of this is good. It is very well presented and is well-structured.  The main thing you need to work on is writing more simply and preciesly. Sometimes your expression doesn’t quite come across clearly. Write a little more like you would say it -  that might help. Try to choose exactly the right word.

 

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1.       Bend It Like Beckham  [for film titles either italicise or use inverted commas]

2.      by setting us into the central of a Sikh family in London that is demanding to class experience of life in a foreign country. [slightly awkward expression here – write more simply and precisely]

3.       She fantasizes of football stardom [about football stardom]

4.       of god to a maternity above [slightly awkward expression here]

5.       pass as a teenage tangent. [‘tangent’ not the right word here]

 

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Great Expectations Essay b

This is a good first draft. In the Settings Section, try to say something a bit more specific about the actual words Dickens uses and what effect they have. Does a particular word or group of words make the setting frightening of gloomy for example. In the dialogue section, concentrate on where there is a conversation between two or more characters, this is what ‘dialogue’ refers to, rather than Pip telling his personal story. Also check for spelling and punctuation errors.

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1.       part in great expectations [“Great Expectations” or italicise]

2.       The settings that Dickens decides are [chooses?]

3.       The souround atmosphere is [surrounding]

4.       Catastrophic[.] Pip is located at a graveyard gazing at his families[‘] tombs they had all died here is a quote to show that his

5.       Dialouge: [Dialogue]

 

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My living nishtmare

This is well written with good attention to detail. You get across a sense of fear and tension very well indeed.  Some good devices for tricking the reader – the dream, and the blood on the floor. Good ending too. Take care with punctuation however.

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1.       I walked briskly, past the school corridor, towards the entrance [no need for commas here]

2.       Taxi must [taxi]

3.       back”[.] I had to

4.       ” I had to do this, for my [no need for a comma here]

5.       or I will finish you off” He muttered. [or I will finish you off,” he muttered. ]

 

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Of mice and men weaknesses help!

This is a good first draft but need more work on it. You focus on the question and you make a number of good points and support these with reference to the text. However, you need to develop the Curley’s wife section and provide a conclusion. Some of your shorter paragraphs need to be merged  and take care with punctuation (see below).

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1.       Of Mice and men” [“Of Mice and Men”]

2.       The novel [,]set in a ranch populated by travelling manual work[er]s[,] means that it is an

3.       Candy is portrayed as an old handyman, aging and left with one hand as a result of an accident worries that his boss will soon declare him useless and get rid of work for him [this doesn’t flow grammatically – perhaps break up into two sentences]

4.       be available, this is [full stop rather than comma needed here]

5.       "You seen what they done to my ... dog tonight? They says he wasn’t no good to himself nor nobody else. When they can me here I wisht somebody’d shoot me. But they won’t do nothing like that. I won’t have no place to go, an’ I can’t get no more jobs[“]

 

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War poetry

This is a good analysis of the three poems. Showing good understanding and attention to detail. Generally, your writing is clear and fluent but heck for punctuation errors and occasional grammatical errors such as those below. To get extra marks it might be good to offer some comparisons between the poems and to offer a conclusion.

Notes:

1.     of many[,] causing chaos and horror

2.     Other’s see war as [Others see]

3.     but I disagree [.]I feel

4.     Horse’s hooves  [horses’ hooves]

5.     seen to be a create devours lives of others [creature that devours]

 

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macbeth

This is a sharply focused, well-structured and well-balanced essay. You explore the topic in dept and support your points with well0integrated quotations. You write very clearly and fluently. Check for typos, however. Excellent!

 

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1. see him go fro a loyal subject [from]

 

2. At the start of the ply [play]

 

3. about the after life [afterlife - one word]

 

4. him the tree apparitions [three]

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Macbeth English coursework

This is an excellent piece of work. It is detailed, through, well-written and well supported. You show a very good awareness of the historical background to the pay, perceptions of gender at the time and the likely impact of the women on the play on a Shakespearian audience. Well done!

 

Take care with your use of the possessive apostrophe.

 

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1. [dual – duel means pistols at dawn!]

 

2. to the Witches[‘] prophecy

 

3. between the witch’s prophecy [between the Witches’ prophecy

 

4. As shown by Lady Macbeth[‘]s

 

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Analysing peoms and answering exam quest

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Courage in to kill a mockingbird

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