This is a thorough, conscientious and detailed essay. You thoroughly engage with the play and support your points with close reference to the text. Generally well-written but your punctuation does need some attention at times.


Notes:

1. stability has declined from [have declined]


2. down” we also [down”. We also]

3. Macbeth uses imperative language to speak to the lords at the banquet, as the audience we see that Macbeth has a power over the lords as that of a true king, “ your know your own degrees sit down” we also see that Macbeth has great potential as a king when he displays a democratic side to him as he tells the lords, “ both sides are even : here I’ll sit in the mid’st” saying this Macbeth’s ploy is to show that he is fair and believes that although he is king he will still sit side by side with his “society” hence reminding the audience how Macbeth was perceived by others at the beginning of the play, possibly his former greatness to which he was seen as others as a “worthy gentleman” and described as almost immortal, yet we can see that he is acting as “thi innocent flower and be[ing] the serpent under’t” Shakespeare uses his theme of duality to reveal the insincerity of Macbeth’s character this perhaps shows how Macbeth is actually deteriorating instead of fulfilling his position as the king of Scotland.
[one sentence! – You need to use full stops where necessary!]

4. of the timeand [time and]

5. the graced person of our banquo [be] present” [Banquo]

6. Again Macbeth’s theme of appearance and reality arise and it is left to the audience to believe [italicise ‘Macbeth’ when you are referring to the play]

7. Don’t use ‘throughout’ to start your paragraphs too frequently.

This is a well-focused, convincing and well-structured analysis. Your essay might benefit form drawing out more contrasts between the two couples and also using linking words and phrases when you switch from one pair of characters to another. Otherwise good!

Notes:

1. In Scene I, Stanley [you switch to a new subject very abruptly – think if linking words and phrases – e.g ‘In contrast’.]

2. This may be borne out of a reluctance for either character. [not clear]

3. archetypical [archetypal]

This is a very good piece of writing. You create a very convincing situation and your ability to describe the situation is very impressive. Check for minor errors below and I wonder whether the use of ‘I’ in the first paragraph is appropriate?


Notes:

1. what its like. Take [it’s]

2. itched her bare legs [tickled?]

3. Her fist time and there [first]

4. house to how her love. [show]

5. she could stuffy him [study]

6. so its only fair she had to as well [it was]

7. 40 pound? [Forty pounds?]

This is a sophisticated and mature response. You show a really good grasp of Blake the man, his poetry, his ideas and his poetic techniques. About half of your essay is very focused but I think in the latter half you stray a little and the sharp focus – education - is lost, even though your analysis is very good in a broader context. Good work but stay focused.

Notes:

1. could connotate dirt and corruption [connote]

This is well written and clearly structured. Unfortunately, you seem to be having problems with the time limit as the second part of your essay is undeveloped. The first part is purposeful but you need to be more precise at times in indicating the significance of costume and changes of hairstyle.

Notes:

1. The state of clothing was fair [not precise]